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Featured here is a layout/loose roughs of something that's been put on the back burner, but it is concept I really started getting into so I will probably finish this off even if it's not published. If I can finish in time I'll include it in the sketchbook I'm going to release at Phoenix Comic Con. ...oh yeah I said it. Sketchbook.

Wile I know a lot of folks like seeing these sketches I also really enjoy hearing your input and thoughts during this stage so this is open for critique.

As you can see there are some issues with the arm holding the sword and her legs, and though I have some ideas on how to fix them, I thought I'd hear what some of you may have to say. Perhaps you have an idea I didn't see before.

I will try to comment and reply to everyone if I can.
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Critique by ~firepunk626 Apr 23, 2010, 1:16:16 PM
I would angle her right hand so that the sword is running up parallel along her arm more, kinda ninja assassin style i guess. Or throw a bend in at the elbow and give her more of a defensive stance with the sword arm. And maybe a little more attitude on her face. With that much swirling energy/ fire going on, and holding a sword like she is looking for a fight it seems that she should look a little less passive. Other than that without really knowing the story there's not much else that can be said. Looking good so far though.
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Critique by ~KeungLee Apr 23, 2010, 12:42:14 PM
You've got the pose down solid but, like you said, the limbs could use some adjusting. Honestly, I think you'll have it down in no time.

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I have some input to offer that might spur a creative thought.

Granted it's still in its rough stage, the sword looks very plain and generic, yet it's the second most prominent feature in the piece.

I'd suggest breathing some life into the sword. With it coming out into the foreground a lot of attention is drawn to it (and conveniently it also draws the eyes to the butt!).

Give the sword some character; maybe some runes or engravings along the blade, or an intricate hilt. I'm a fantasy junkie if you couldn't tell, lol.

Adding in my own personal preference, slightly bigger butt an' thicker thighs, lmao! The effects you've got around the legs are a nice touch but seem a tad underplayed.

That's all I've got, hope it helps some! :#1:
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~Carl-Riley-Art May 26, 2010
Cool!!! hope you get to progress this to finished pencils, Mike... would make an awesom cover :thumbsup:
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~tZuB May 10, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
damn! that's wonderful! you have to finish it. Now i'm tired and, even if i am supposed to know how to pose a lady and how to draw arms and legs and hands i am a fuckin' dick head and i really waste lots of time searching the right way to draw fingers and legs most of all. I don't know if i'm right but her left leg is too bended...i'd draw straight the WTF-is-called part of the leg under the knee to get a more stable stance. the arm looks fine for me, but the hand is too small, and don't ask me about fingers! daaamn, i wish we all have hand like LEGO
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!silentosh May 5, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Haha I can't "critique" since I'm not a premium member, but I would have to say I agree about the hands...maybe find a way to make them a bit more prominent. And I'd say if it's not too late in the game, try spreading her legs out a bit so she seems more grounded. Other than that, simply AMAZING!
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*knytcrawlr May 5, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
in reply to :iconfirepunk626: crit:

Personally, I love how the sword is not paralleled to the arm, it gives the image more depth that the sword is more pointed at the viewer.

I do however agree with you about a slight bend in the arm for a more of a defensive stance with the sword arm.

The face I thought was well done, not overly aggressive, but still all business.

Personally, I love the image and can't wait for a colourist to come along really bring the bad-assery of this image through!

great line work
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Mood: Wow! ~Darkroot27 May 4, 2010
Well, first of all you are a talented artist. Your proportions are really good. Watch that sword blade it looks really funny. The back of the knees of her right leg, I think, need to show those major tendons if she is putting any weight on it. Compositionaly,I would like to see it just to the right of the page; think about composition lines. Otherwise,it works great especially for a pinup-type cover art. Looks really great though. I really enjoy what you did with the face and neck. Those are my favorite areas. Overall, fantastic job. Let me know what you think.
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*SquirrelShaver May 4, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks for the advise. These are the kind of thoughtful critiques I really look for, so thank you very much.
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~MassMurdurah Apr 29, 2010
well, if shes gonna have her hand behind her body, i think it would be uncomfortable to hold a sword like that. pointed up at an angle.
she would have to bend the shit ouut of her wrist in order to be in that position... unless she is swinging it forward i guess.
maybe im not that flexible, but try it.. doesn't feel so great...

maybe just cuz i dont know what she is doing there, or whats happening... hmmm. but yea...
everything else fits tho. real deal.
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~Cynday Apr 28, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
id love for her hair to be more rough and unmanaged. I think that would really add to the sex appeal.
I've had the same perdicament with my art. say you really like how the butt looks but the legs just arent coming together. i usually have to suck it up and start it over. But in this case i dont think she would look so bad if her left leg was straight but it would probley create to much of a line. blah. good luckers ;-)
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~Karyudo-DS Apr 28, 2010
The back leg does look a bit short. You could lengthen it but given the pose I might widen her stance slightly. Looks a bit tight. I don't think the sword arm looks bad though, maybe it needs tweaking but the swords angle stands out o me instead.
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~RedCapMan Apr 28, 2010   General Artist
Nice lines, looking good, and thanks for the fav.
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