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Featured here is a layout/loose roughs of something that's been put on the back burner, but it is concept I really started getting into so I will probably finish this off even if it's not published. If I can finish in time I'll include it in the sketchbook I'm going to release at Phoenix Comic Con. ...oh yeah I said it. Sketchbook.

Wile I know a lot of folks like seeing these sketches I also really enjoy hearing your input and thoughts during this stage so this is open for critique.

As you can see there are some issues with the arm holding the sword and her legs, and though I have some ideas on how to fix them, I thought I'd hear what some of you may have to say. Perhaps you have an idea I didn't see before.

I will try to comment and reply to everyone if I can.
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:iconwendylynn:
I'm by no means an expert but you asked for ideas, so here you go. I think it's FABULOUS to start off with. The fire all points back to her, so it draws your eyes to her really well. And the swirl at the bottom helps bring your eye back up to her.

About her hand, maybe try twisting it to be palm-up? Might work better than holding the sword backwards. And about her leg, the left leg looks like it needs to be a tad straighter, because from the pose it looks like she would be putting her weight on that food.

Okay that's it! Great job Mike! :thumbsup:
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You've got the pose down solid but, like you said, the limbs could use some adjusting. Honestly, I think you'll have it down in no time.

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I have some input to offer that might spur a creative thought.

Granted it's still in its rough stage, the sword looks very plain and generic, yet it's the second most prominent feature in the piece.

I'd suggest breathing some life into the sword. With it coming out into the foreground a lot of attention is drawn to it (and conveniently it also draws the eyes to the butt!).

Give the sword some character; maybe some runes or engravings along the blade, or an intricate hilt. I'm a fantasy junkie if you couldn't tell, lol.

Adding in my own personal preference, slightly bigger butt an' thicker thighs, lmao! The effects you've got around the legs are a nice touch but seem a tad underplayed.

That's all I've got, hope it helps some! :#1:
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Carl-Riley-Art Featured By Owner May 26, 2010
Cool!!! hope you get to progress this to finished pencils, Mike... would make an awesom cover :thumbsup:
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tZuB Featured By Owner May 10, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
damn! that's wonderful! you have to finish it. Now i'm tired and, even if i am supposed to know how to pose a lady and how to draw arms and legs and hands i am a fuckin' dick head and i really waste lots of time searching the right way to draw fingers and legs most of all. I don't know if i'm right but her left leg is too bended...i'd draw straight the WTF-is-called part of the leg under the knee to get a more stable stance. the arm looks fine for me, but the hand is too small, and don't ask me about fingers! daaamn, i wish we all have hand like LEGO
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silentosh Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Haha I can't "critique" since I'm not a premium member, but I would have to say I agree about the hands...maybe find a way to make them a bit more prominent. And I'd say if it's not too late in the game, try spreading her legs out a bit so she seems more grounded. Other than that, simply AMAZING!
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knytcrawlr Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
in reply to :iconfirepunk626: crit:

Personally, I love how the sword is not paralleled to the arm, it gives the image more depth that the sword is more pointed at the viewer.

I do however agree with you about a slight bend in the arm for a more of a defensive stance with the sword arm.

The face I thought was well done, not overly aggressive, but still all business.

Personally, I love the image and can't wait for a colourist to come along really bring the bad-assery of this image through!

great line work
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Darkroot27 Featured By Owner May 4, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Well, first of all you are a talented artist. Your proportions are really good. Watch that sword blade it looks really funny. The back of the knees of her right leg, I think, need to show those major tendons if she is putting any weight on it. Compositionaly,I would like to see it just to the right of the page; think about composition lines. Otherwise,it works great especially for a pinup-type cover art. Looks really great though. I really enjoy what you did with the face and neck. Those are my favorite areas. Overall, fantastic job. Let me know what you think.
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SquirrelShaver Featured By Owner May 4, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks for the advise. These are the kind of thoughtful critiques I really look for, so thank you very much.
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MassMurdurah Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
well, if shes gonna have her hand behind her body, i think it would be uncomfortable to hold a sword like that. pointed up at an angle.
she would have to bend the shit ouut of her wrist in order to be in that position... unless she is swinging it forward i guess.
maybe im not that flexible, but try it.. doesn't feel so great...

maybe just cuz i dont know what she is doing there, or whats happening... hmmm. but yea...
everything else fits tho. real deal.
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Cynday Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
id love for her hair to be more rough and unmanaged. I think that would really add to the sex appeal.
I've had the same perdicament with my art. say you really like how the butt looks but the legs just arent coming together. i usually have to suck it up and start it over. But in this case i dont think she would look so bad if her left leg was straight but it would probley create to much of a line. blah. good luckers ;-)
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Karyudo-DS Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2010
The back leg does look a bit short. You could lengthen it but given the pose I might widen her stance slightly. Looks a bit tight. I don't think the sword arm looks bad though, maybe it needs tweaking but the swords angle stands out o me instead.
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RedCapMan Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2010   General Artist
Nice lines, looking good, and thanks for the fav.
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Hacketo Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010  Student Digital Artist
One Word:



WOW
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duanenicholsart Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010
Explosive! :)
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ChaniCthau Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
Ok here's my two cents.

I'm loving the super hero kind of poses, and they are by far the hardest to do, because thy usually imply a sort of concentration, by the character.

In this one ... the arm doesn't really bother me. But the legs do. They are a bit on the thick side. But imho you should work on the bum a bit too. I mean .. the right buttcheek should be just shades .. not an actual line ... i think..

Anyway, you got mad skills man, and asking for criticism is more brave than i will ever be. I just post my stuff and hope no one says bad stuff :P
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blackhawkx Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
very nice work
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T-blan Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Very nice :clap:, just like you mention the arm is the only mistake noticeable in the drawing the blade is a little too high for the way the wrist is twist , and for the right leg ,the knee cap shouldn't be showing ,and you could adjust the bust, just a little because from the angle i see her back i don't think it would possible to see much of it
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Narked Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
This is good stuff here! Maybe a little
more work on the sword, like a swing effect, Your flames look a tad more like
water splashing, but i see mostly good stuff here!
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malevolentlover Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
Awesome as always. Me being not in the position to really critique, I will only point out one thing - the legs look funny. Someone above mentioned it too; she looks like she's afraid. Then again, I'm sure it's hard to get the butt-sticking-out affect without having some bend. *shrug* I'm just a reader, though :)

Great as always!
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Okina-SilentEcho Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2010
So wish I were a premium member to do a legitimate crit on this one...

I love the concept. The juxtaposition of beauty and fierce "warrior-like" attitude is amazing. I assume it goes along with: [link]

Loving it, my friend. Would love to see it colored.
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Morrbyd Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
It looks awesome to me cant wait to see it finished.
The only thing that I can see with the arm holding the sword is that, in my opinion, the wrist is too thick which makes the arm look too short. Just slightly though. I had to study the picture to see it. Then if you left it the way it was, I'm sure everyone would love it too.
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yarro Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
Very nice. She has that gotcha look on her face and the way her hair seems to be continuing motion after her head has stopped turning.
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qualano Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Very cool;)
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2corpses Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
if i could draw women like u... id become a major perv.. well a more obvious perv.
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Ronron84 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010  Professional General Artist
Since I don't have a Premium Membership, I can't write a formal critique. Still, I think this looks great thus far. As far as the hand is concerned, I wonder if it would be easier to have her palm up instead of the back of her hand.

Great work!
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nikkimagnusson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
Beautiful Artistry… Perfect!!....puss puss Nikki
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wildpegasus13 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010
I will have to keep an eye out for you in Phoenix.
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Bappie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2010   Traditional Artist
Well I am no wonder in giving critique in English but I'll give it a try. (Also I have to be subscribed or that button won't do shit)

If she is holding a katana;

then I think you should look up how the Japanese drew fire on those old scrolls of them because with the way the background and her pose is sketches now it could be easily mistaken by those stereotyped water-splashing background Japan is so known for. (and we all know that people are suckers for stereotypes)

Her upper body is good though. Even though she is in deep fiery shit she can still kick ass and find the exit on time. Her legs though don't really show the same so I would suggest that they stand more in an action pose that would suit the upperbody. (While keeping her butt right since that is what I am mostly reading about in the other comments)

I can say little on her katana/sword and hands still I am still struggling with that myself so I'll hush on that subject.

For the rest;

Dude! Congratulation on your Sketchbook but can I only get the sketchbook at the Phoenix Comic Con?
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RedWingsDragon Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Awesome work here
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Evinfowler Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
yeah, see the problem you're going to run into with that "weeding the critiques from the crowd" thing, is that you'll only get it from the ones who bay for DA, and some of us poor folk might have good stuff to say. for instance: i like her ass.
:lol: seriously though, the hand looks like you should draw it between the size you have it now, and the size it looks like you drew it originally. right now it looks like it's the same size as her far hand, which makes it look a bit off.
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Lady-Vallentine Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional General Artist
Wow!Wonderful!!!!!!!
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RayArtz Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
looks purty cool, is that Cindy?
Looking forward to your hearing more of about this sketch book
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fatmandreams Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
its lookin great so far
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CarlShinyama Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love it!
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salamanderFLAME Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Lovely job.:love:
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sketchartist76 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Ohhhh...really like the layout...you damn well better save me one of those sketchbooks bro :)
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Salient-Photography Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
maybe make the right lower arm more forward?? if that makes any sense. because it looks like the right arm is straight.. other than that it's kick a$$.
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BrenGun Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
looks really great man!!!!!!
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Cassie-Jimenez Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
This is so beautiful!!! WOW
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ThePrincessNightmare Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Artisan Crafter
wow georgous! love the pose and the sword
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andrewlawart Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Yeah with the face again... You hve the head tilted down and looking over the shoulder but the face is looking up and forwards in front of the shoulder...
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andrewlawart Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Face is beautiful but if you move the features a little to the left.

Sword bends from the handle upwards instead of being straight (looks like the metal is kinked) and the fingers of the hand that are holding the sword would probably be angled towards the bottom left corner of drawing instead of the right.

Great concept and great sketch! Can't wait to see finished
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WANWO Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Wow! how u draw it? it was quick sketch or it took much time?
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Wolkenfels Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
You know i like your drawings.
The girls is smoking hot and the lines are really a joy to watch.
What i miss is a bit more story in the picture.
Sure - a great girl in a great pose... but why the pose and what happens next?
Just a little bit more to start the imagination.
only my 2 cent.
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jimjimmyjones85 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
I hope you make the sketchbook available to the likes of us that can't make it to Phoenix :D

Ok, I like the piece...

I think her knees look they are knocking so she almost looks scared.

I think her arm needs a slight bend to look more natural.

I also always have an issue with head neck alignment. I think you can;t turn your head that far all the time.

But that is just me (since you asked).

I continue to love all your work.
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sanjun Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Hay Mike this is really nice,her body language is great.Its HOT.

Only her right stoking looks something different.

great work as always
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foxstatic Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional Photographer
Dude........sick! Can't wait to see your final product. Love the sword and lower back work.
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WendyLynn Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
PS. Don't you dare change her face, it's smokin hot!
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Muady Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Nice work man, all i have to say is... Make her butt bigger^^
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3DXcentric Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awesome, love the crosstichings
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psicofarmaco Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
I read it quickly and i thought that said fire butt. But I wasn't all wrong, that ass is on fire!!

Exelent work!!
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rainwaterfall Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
is this alice or tiny bell not sure but I absoultely love it!
^^)
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